Cloud and thunder, storm and rain, I will summon these elements to bring you the most intense pain.
This one is a bit a no-no one for me .
The overall result isn't very eye-appealing. You could've done more.
You've left out many black spots, that could be easily filled up with some of your C4D's.
The flow is good, but it's too ''swirly'', I'd just make it go in one direction.
The focal is a bit messed up, your eyes are looking all over Jiraiya's body, IDK if that was your idea behind it, but if I were you, I'd focus on just one piece, like his face/ponytail.
The color is a meh, I don't think it suits Jiraiya. I'd go for a more red'ish color.
The text is just great, as always, so is the lightning.
Sorry mang, I'm really sorry that I've got to disagree with everybody 'round here.
I usually love your work.