Tbh it just looks like a lot of random C4D's placed ontop of each other, then a render stuck in it. Nothing blends, you have so many differen't colours in one piece. A good thing i would say is you have some sort of flow going which is good. You just need to read some tuts, and read up about effects/blending/lighting, etc. Start off with a pleasing looking background and build on it, don't be afraid to scrap shit you've done, and just keep trying mate.
He Who Dares Wins And i'll die to win, cause i'm born to lose Fucking Civilian