On the Mpgh Server hidden between microchips but Shh..!!
i know i am also a beginner but then i am also entitled to my say:
i think that the random blots of light / objects everywhere take away from the main aspect, ( the person ). You don't want the objects to be seperate from the picture, try to engage them in with the person and make it flow instead of being pin pricked objects, you should add more light into it so its almost easier to 'read' if you like.
The same with the random objects, the writing should be 1 with the main aspect, and only be a bonus feature unless you want the main aspect to be the writing, you should pick colours that flow nicely with each other and try not to blur them and have them too separated, if the words are not your key aspect, have them at a minimal.
thats all i can kinda see in it.
if im wrong someone please correct me,