You gotta incorporate some of that bg color onto the focal bro,
otherwise it looks like you just slapped your render on.
You are using a focal point that was digipanted.
That's really a tough thing to do unless you have a bg that has similar texture integrity.
Point in hand here, is look at the quality of the c4d's opposed to your render.
Much better, and they actually have some depth to them..where the focal lacks that 3d look.
The text is really choppy.. and never really your strong point anyway..
so'z.. The good thing out of this whole deal is that I'm glad you are straying away from your old style,
and trying some unexplored territory.. but don't stray to far away,
always keep fundamentals close to your train of thought, even when that creative side wants to take complete control.