I dont really like this one Martin.
I don't really like how you focused on one color, and there is like no lighting what so ever.
text is OK.
The C4D looks like a clipping mask with bash_set12 brushes. And it just looks over sharpened an its a bit to bright.
So to sum it all up:
More diverse colors
Brightness of c4d
smoothness of c4d
also the render has like no flow :/