text is ok except the font is not the best. Um, too much random shit on the focal, the focal should pop out and shouldn't have c4d on it, onl ya little bit to add to the. Left side is kind of broing not much going on other than the green c4d. its a good one dont get me wrong its just that some tweaks could make it look great. Also lighting could use some work too. But i really like the flow.