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    Rap, Poem whatever

    This my rap/Poem or whatever you wanna call it. Anyway you can hate i really dont care so here it goes

    As the day fades to black
    As I feel the need to be
    As I carry more on my back
    As I feel the need to be more than me

    The ones I loved gone
    The things I need
    It finnaly starts to dawn
    I need to be more then me

    You always turn away
    When I start to say
    Why I feel this way
    As my rap sprays and sprays

    Youve got a new man
    So why did you even care
    As I have always given you a hand
    It doesnt seem fair

    You left me in the rain
    As you ran with blood
    As my gushing wounds felt the pain
    I got up only to fall into the mud

    You left me with scars
    You left me with only the ghost
    As you left and I ran after your car
    You left me and I followed you coast to coast

    So you coudnt care more
    As you left a knife in my chest
    As I hit the floor
    I cared for you the best

    Revenge is full of hate
    Yours was worse
    Leaving me to my fate
    Carrying me away in a hearse

    So I ask why
    What did I do
    To be so high
    For being a fool?

    I was a fool
    For trusting for you
    Last edited by coledes1996; 01-15-2010 at 01:11 AM.

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    Well it was good man =)

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    nice work agreed The only person you can trust is yourself!

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    thanks guys

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    So beutiful, i cried

    awesome man, just awesome

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    nice poem. Might wanna get some band-aids... =/

    "Every gun that is made, every warship launched, every rocket fired signifies, in the final sense, a theft from those who hunger and are not fed, those who are cold and are not clothed. This world in arms is not spending money alone. It is spending the sweat of its laborers, the genius of its scientists, the hopes of its children. The cost of one modern heavy bomber is this: a modern brick school in more than 30 cities. It is two electric power plants, each serving a town of 60,000 population. It is two fine, fully equipped hospitals. It is some fifty miles of concrete pavement. We pay for a single fighter plane with a half million bushels of wheat. We pay for a single destroyer with new homes that could have housed more than 8,000 people. This is, I repeat, the best way of life to be found on the road the world has been taking. This is not a way of life at all, in any true sense. Under the cloud of threatening war, it is humanity hanging from a cross of iron."
    - Dwight D. Eisenhower

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    Quote Originally Posted by why06 View Post
    nice poem. Might wanna get some band-aids... =/
    yeah i probably should go get some band-aids

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    I loved it.

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    Quote Originally Posted by -James View Post
    I loved it.
    thanks it took a while for it all to rhyme

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