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    Life

    life

    is full of choices And decisions
    people make every single day
    every man has got his own mission
    so listen to what i got to say.

    a man whithout a dream
    is not a man at all
    for what they fear in them
    is the day that they fall.

    they all have a sense of pride
    you can never steal nor break
    altho the tension that lies inside
    your taught to never make a mistake

    for now your a young man growing up
    for you faught for your life and belifes
    you never lost and never gave up
    and you always played for keeps


    for now your a grown man whith a family
    you been unemployed for a few months now
    and all you see is your family happily
    for now your behind on bills you start to feel down

    so now you may lose all you worked for
    all that blood and sweat for this life
    so listen to this befor
    you are not at teh end of your line

    your now a old man in his 70's
    you have came seen and conquerd
    all your kids beg please
    then you fade away and you start to pownder

    you take one more look at the life you have made
    you will leave a impact on everyones life
    for they all know that you cant always stay
    for all men set their bar and you have set your high

    Now that your gone your impact stays
    for everything you have done
    no one will forget even past then end of days
    now this is it breaks me to think that your gone.

    Now for life can be crule and mean
    but you will always move on
    it will never get the best of me
    for thats men life and beyond

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    "a man whithout a dream
    is not a man at all
    for what they fear in them
    is the day that they fall."



    Thats my fav part. Only thing I would work on is the rhythm of the poem, mainly the rhyming part. Poems that don't rhyme repetitively usually are more powerful imo. Just a suggestion.

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    Thanks i will work on the rhyming part. And thanks agin =)

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