I tried to take into account all the criticism I got from my last try, and fix it up in this image so please be as honest as you would like to be, I will take it on board, btw this is my last upload of this image, next will probably be a drawing or something I find interesting,
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thank you for supporting me with my last upload, much appreciated!
The second image is the original. (it was requested I put this in.)