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    The Poem I made

    I made the following Poem using a Base from an original Poem.
    Then I made it Personal, please don't say it's Racist Please...

    What I See in The Mirror

    Sometimes, when I look in the mirror,
    I see a Mexican staring back at me.
    His vacations to Mexico flash back through his mind,
    seeing a majority of his family working and relaxing.

    Sometimes, when I look in the mirror,
    I see an American looking back at me.
    His past comes back,
    seeing the little family he has with him,
    some illegal and others not.

    Sometimes, when I look in the mirror,
    the Mexican is playing soccer, but isn't very good.
    He does not quit, but instead keeps playing,
    trying to get better and win next time.

    Sometimes, when I look in the mirror,
    the American bot plays baseball and is horrible.
    So he quits and tries to find something else,
    something he's already can win and is good at.

    Sometimes, when I look in the mirror,
    none iof these sides come to greet me.
    Instead, they stay away,
    making me sad and lonely.
    Wondering who I really am and who I want to be.

    Sometimes, they both come together,
    trying to make me both.
    Wanting me to be their way,
    and not letting me decide.
    Taking over my thoughts and heart.

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    good deal to the point, the person in the mirror is you. very descriptive.

    one thing though to prevent flamers go ahead and edit your post and get rid of the typo in "none iof these sides"

    all in all good job

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    nice goodjob.

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