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    My empty soul

    My life is a blur, right in front of my eyes
    Barely tangible in my mind
    I stare blankly at my page
    And wonder what to write
    What would be the point
    Of writing a story about my heart
    Blackened by deceit
    My soul,
    Consumed by the fire of my hatred
    My body,
    Ruined in the horror of war
    When all my love is lost
    What is there to be left?
    An empty husk of a person
    Warped by his own sins
    What is there to live for,
    When nothing resides within?
    Except a mind full of regret
    And a darkness that pulls me in

    tell me what you think guys
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    Wayy better than what i could ever do. Nice beat to it but behind it a great story

    a 9.5/10 compared to my standards

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    k3wl poem bro.
    I liked the flow.
    Good and long.
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    you get a 10 if you make a poem about kriss , neon green and razer

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    Very nicely done, Core emotion, and raw. great job.


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    yeah nicely done. it is true emotion

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