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    [Raw] The Road

    This relationship has taken a turn for the worse
    Cause girl when you act like this
    All I wanna do is curse
    A rage I cannot contain, you just make me so pissed
    So I'm done
    Sick of the crying
    Back on the road and on the run
    Always acting as if you were dying
    No matter how many txts
    Or how many letters
    I know it cannot get much better
    So its official, you own the title of ex

    Where will I go?
    With only a tank of gas
    A one night stand with some kind of hoe?
    Ehh, I think I'll pass
    Cause I'm looking for a girl with a little more class
    A girl that I can live with the rest of my life
    And maybe even make her my wife
    But she better not give me any sass
    Cause then, I'll be on the road again
    A familiar friend
    Alone, with nothing but a cold winter night
    But as long as I'm away from all those damn fights
    And I know, that I can't run from my past
    Filled with emptiness and broken dreams
    Unable to heal no matter how big a cast
    This damned story needs a new theme

    So I'm on the road again
    A familiar friend
    Alone, with nothing but a cold winter night
    But as long as I'm away from those damn fights

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    Nice..Could be better though

    Last edited by HiddenoO; 12-11-2010 at 01:16 PM.

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    Thanks for the feed back bro, always appreciated. That was the raw version, trying to edit now

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    Yeah, here's a tip you could take into consideration;
    When you type it out/write it..Do a few lines like so:\
    ~Rap~~End Word 1~
    ~Rap~~~~~~~
    ~Rap~~Word that rhymes with End Word 1~

    Usually putting a few lines before the ending rhymes makes it a bit better.