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    [SONG] Pity

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    [RAP]I pity the boy
    [RAP]That made you cry
    [RAP]I pity the boy
    [RAP]That made you die
    [RAP]I pity everything we do
    [SCREAM]It all seems like we were meant to die
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    [SING Girl]You remind me of all the shame and pain
    [SING Guy]Of all the things he did to you
    [SING Guy]You take it all in
    [SCREAM]Then pass it like the flu
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    [SING Guy]I feel that you don't have no more life
    [SING Girl]I feel that you don't have no shame
    [SING Guy]I feel for you in the dark
    [SING Girl]But I feel nothing but that darkness
    [CHORUS]Consuming you
    [Sing Guy]Eating you
    [SCREAM]Controlling all that hatred
    -[END]-
    That's it. Nice and short...

    It's suppose to be kind of like City by Hollywood Undead

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    I mean, it a pretty cool style with the rapping and screams, but the scream lines seem like they are too much "rap". Anyways, good job.
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