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    Room for improvement?

    I illustrate the world with an eye and a program,
    Technology's being corrupted, so I stay protected from Trojans,
    Raps getting too predictable, ugly and despicable,
    I use to listen to hip hop and rap to get away from the bullshit,
    But all I ever hear is garbage, especially on the new top ten hits,
    I listen to all this hype, but these tracks just ain't my type,
    But who am I to judge, Can't spit a single verse,
    Just here to entice the mind and watch it disperse,
    Deception lies truly within, how you appeal it, runs with affection,
    It ain't nothing but a test of detection,
    A lyrical pyromaniac spitting out flames,
    High hopes to hit fame, but you bring shame to ya name,
    Just cause you ain't like them,
    So what's up with that? Guess ya gotta conform,
    Then again that's where corruption stems,
    So choose wisely from where ya wanna begin,
    As sick as rap legends are, it'll never be contagious,
    talent and lyrics' about to be faded,
    Or maybe I'm just a cynical prick,
    Pessimism adapts slow, but eventually it takes over,
    Cause what I meant to bestow, was like a flour leaf clover,
    But you can take it as a joke, because Iím the one listening,
    While they talk about money flying up the slope,
    I gotta check my wallet, hoping I ainít gone broke,
    But Iím casual and wear a clean grin,
    Covered in smoke, got a new deal, got some kill dope,
    Take a hit, take a journey, find bliss,
    and itís always ending up like this,
    until one day I looked into the Abyss, and it look back at me,
    Only to see something deeper than it could ever be,
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    This is pretty good. You have a softer style of rapping. I like it.