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    Struggle of an outcast ~ TFK [WIP] Cn'C please.

    This is a work in progress, I feel it's probably one of my better written ones, I think my flows pretty good on here, but like I said, it's a work in-progress, other think I'd like to ask is best way to ge a stage name, my name is Tristan Fowler-Knudsen (look me up on facebook if you want idgaf) so I was planning on going by TFK, but there is already a more successful rapper with that name, so Idk, any ways, hope you like the song, I'm learning to produce beats too, so hopefully you'll start hearing me sound a little more professional. Thanks for watching, please tell me what you think, even if it's bad reviews, just as long as you let me know what you don't like about it, so yeah, Peace every one.


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    I think you need to project your voice more, speak the lines more confidently. I think the beat was okay, and the lyrics were decent...some of the cursing seemed out of place.

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    Thanks man, I've been looking for some one to tell me what they think is wrong. Helps you get better ya know?
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    All I could understand was the cursing...how about more confidence with the rest of the words?

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    not bad continueeeeeeeeeeeee

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    hey dude i make beats, if you want to rap over some of mine that would be tight. If not its all cool, my production is kinda sample based but I hope it fits your style. FunkyRL

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    I would love too, I've downloaded a few of them, and I'm going to write something when I'm skipping class tomorrow, I'll see if I can get something together and posted when I get home.
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    A white boi that wants to be a nigger..... "Sing" higher dude, and more conviction please

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    You are entilted to your opinion.
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