Fucking Moron (07-08-2016)
is it bad that i compare you to her?
every move she makes, my mind flickers back to you. the way she walks makes me miss the way you couldn't in your heels. the way she looks in my eyes makes me think about the way your green ones once held me captive. the way she pouts whens he doesn't get her way makes me think about they way you stuck your tongue out instead. the way she kisses me.. i don't think it will ever compare to yours. and the way she loves me, it's nothing at all like what we had.
i don't know. maybe it's just time. i hate thinking about you when i should be thinking about her, because i want to love her and move past you. but, damn you're like a tattoo. i still can't get you off my mind after all this time.
Schuba is my main nigga.
Fucking Moron (07-08-2016)
The poem/writing is good. The photo is pretty cool too, but it's not really anything impressive.
Schuba is my main nigga.
Gaar (07-08-2016)
if you haven't seen the "tag" it says poetry, the image meaning nothing to the poetry. i myself wanted to use an image, it relates nothing to the writing written in the quoted text...
poetry is an art form in itself, it doesn't have to be an "image" to be art.
i highly recommend getting a new fucking brain that's smarter.
Schuba is my main nigga.
Gaar (07-08-2016)
goddamnit23 (07-08-2016)
If you chose to put together an image and your poem, then why did you choose a meaningless photo that has no relation with the text itself?
I'm absolutely fine when you say the poem is what matters, don't get me wrong.
Anyway, as far as the poetry itself goes, i didn't expect you to write in prose?
I don't know, at least blank verses maybe? As in "poetry written in regular, metrical, but unrhymed, lines".
I'm personally not in love with the words you used either, it seems something a teenager would write after he takes a fancy.
poem is alright but kinda hard to read.
girl is 10/10
goddamnit23 (07-08-2016)
The girl is fucking awesome.
I liked the poetry too.
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goddamnit23 (07-08-2016)
i have come to the conclusion that people like yourself is actually dumb.
i honestly have no fucking idea what you mean dude...
I chose that photo because i didn't have a photo for the poem? yeah i could've searched on google for an image relating to the poem, but i didn't. why? if people didn't like the poem like yourself, you can enjoy a fine ass chica m8. regarding the poetry itself? am i suppose to "rhymed lines" or "metrical lines" etc? fuck no, if you read the #5 reply you'd understand that poetry is an art form in my opinion atleast, look at it from that perspective maybe? you can create art however you fucking please, it's YOUR art dude, i expressed my emotions and feelings etc through words, which is again an art form, i don't need to rhyme if didn't want to.
please understand, if not don't reply on poetry anymore, saves us time
Schuba is my main nigga.
Finally something useful found on MPGH
Leave the text away though.
Chill out, all i'm saying is that you didn't need a photo to go along with the poem, thus choosing a meaningless one makes for a meaningless decision aswell.
As for the metric, no; i just expected it to not be in prose, it's literally a matter of pressing enter after each dot if you want, i'm not asking you to follow any rule as i said earlier.
You know what i think about the words you used already, i'm surprised you did not comment on that part rather than calling me dumb.
Both are relaly nice, I do have to admit the girl might be better than the poet but it pretty dam good. Flows right and it makes sense to a point.
Logic (07-10-2016)
Schuba is my main nigga.