better freestyle tell me what you think =)

[ShAg123]

heres another freestyle tell me if this ones better and like lyrical and emotion wise?



/me

[Ganja Hero]

I can hear you breathe in some parts but other then that it's alright...Original.

[ShAg123]

thanks man and i am still working on tha breath part and the timing haha

[CRUSTY]

Meh. Decent...

[Ganja Hero]

No problem man, just keep up what you're doing.

[ShAg123]

No problem man, just keep up what you're doing.

yea thanks and crusty whats wrong with it that you dont like??

[Calvin]

Its Alright You Know What You Gotta Improve... Timing And Try Not To Repeat Too Much...

[CRUSTY]

yea thanks and crusty whats wrong with it that you dont like??

Idk, not a fan of rap.

[ShAg123]

Its Alright You Know What You Gotta Improve... Timing And Try Not To Repeat Too Much...

alright i will thank you for tha advise and crusty o ok ahahah that makes sense =)

[Calvin]

Thanks I Appreciate The Thanks... Depending On The Type Of Rap Your Doing Kinda Sounds Like Death Rap But If You Wanna But A Lil Bit Of Hip Hop Into It Add Some Tone In It And Get Into It... You SOund Like Your Talking In A Raping Way... I Hope You Know What Im Saying Change The Tone Up A Bit... This Song Sounds Like


Change It Up A Bit To Sound Like This...


Just Listen To How They CHange Up There Pitch A Little Bit... Make It Sound Fun! /yea

/Thanks Are Appreciated

[ShAg123]

yea i get it and idk it depends what im felling but i will try to put more emotion in it =)

[Calvin]

Alright Bc Thats All Ya Need Because Its Good Over All Thats All You Need To Change Up And Your Perfect!

[ShAg123]

thanks man you think i could go some were if i keep it up?

[ShAg123]

hey guys what yall think?

[Derail]

hey guys what yall think?

I think u double-posted.Other then that,it's Okay.