Collab

[ºThe Gameº]

This is a collab between me and Ryguy

He started it and i finished it. Here is the outcome

pure sexyness /yea

[IMG]https://i612.photobucke*****m/albums/tt201/litlg555/Colab.png[/IMG]

[+dd.Shift]

Kind of messy, not too much clarity. (sometimes it works, mostly doesn't.)

Took me a little bit to distinguish the focal too, it takes up a ton of room, and doesn't stand out too much.

Better lighting, no clear light source, just a ton of spots are light, with a few dark spots.

Depth goes with above, the focal is so big that depth is hard to achieve.

Colors, work on using more of the natural color from the stock, instead of recoloring it with like gradient maps. IMO it looks much nicer.

Overall, just clean it up, pretty messy. Clearer focal + clearer effects.

[ºThe Gameº]

why thank you kind sir
ill improve on it bro

[Ryguy]

Mmm the render was shit but i wanted to try it anyways.

[Ali G]

whoa, wtf, the game is bawk.

[name13]

Kind of messy, not too much clarity. (sometimes it works, mostly doesn't.)

Took me a little bit to distinguish the focal too, it takes up a ton of room, and doesn't stand out too much.

Better lighting, no clear light source, just a ton of spots are light, with a few dark spots.

Depth goes with above, the focal is so big that depth is hard to achieve.

Colors, work on using more of the natural color from the stock, instead of recoloring it with like gradient maps. IMO it looks much nicer.

Overall, just clean it up, pretty messy. Clearer focal + clearer effects.

alive?
i want to see rys start this is a little cluttered and c4ds failed

[Hitmaniac]

Would be nicer If you showed your start and Ryguy's end. I don't know who to CnC too, so yea, don't take it if you didn't do it.

[img]https://d.image*********/0249/collab.png[/img]

Place text somewhere more appropriate, I'm not saying that because its on her titties /

Don't put Random C4D's, would look x5 more better without them.

Try to organize things more, looks messy.

[Ryguy]

Mmm i put the text there to try and make it look like it was on her shirt.


EDIT
Here's my start.
[IMG]https://i238.photobucke*****m/albums/ff303/colby1666/Colab.png[/IMG]

[[MPGH]Ethereal]

There is no depth.
Smudge settings are from 2007.
C4d's are just slapped on and not blended well.
Overall the effects are messy.
Text looks choppy.
Lighting? what lighting.

Try again.

[Ryguy]

Bad render choice on my part imo. I just wanted to see what I could do with this.

[[MPGH]Ethereal]

Bad render choice on my part imo. I just wanted to see what I could do with this.

If you're missing a head,
better go abstract, that is you safest bet.

[ºThe Gameº]

Yall need to stop the hatin n do some actual CnC like shift did

Nyways i do agree it was bad but for those of you who said you don't know who to critique it makes no sense its a collab critique both of us not just 1 person, adurr
I think Ryguy is a great artist and if he wanted to try it its his choice i hate it when people tell you what to do, its like your expressing him as something YOU own which technicaly you don't
so yall need to grow up a bit and learn some actual CnC if im not mistaken there is a guide on how to do so in these forums (last time i remember there was)

and yes AliG im back

[[MPGH]Ethereal]

Yall need to stop the hatin n do some actual CnC like shift did

Nyways i do agree it was bad but for those of you who said you don't know who to critique it makes no sense its a collab critique both of us not just 1 person, adurr
I think Ryguy is a great artist and if he wanted to try it its his choice i hate it when people tell you what to do, its like your expressing him as something YOU own which technicaly you don't
so yall need to grow up a bit and learn some actual CnC if im not mistaken there is a guide on how to do so in these forums (last time i remember there was)

and yes AliG im back

All I seen on this thread was truth.
But k.

[Ryguy]

If you're missing a head,
better go abstract, that is you safest bet.

There was a head, but there wasnt a head.

[Soladis]

Great Way To Put It... :X