Originally Posted by
Empire
As i thought, this video game stuff does not appeal to me in the least.
Idk, maybe my years as a gamer kinda dull the sense of any enjoyment of talk of video games in manga/books. Its just too....idk, lame? They could have done this real-world quite easily. But........
Making it a game, is trivial. Even the "you might die in the game" has been done SO many times its hard to remember why the scenario ISN'T in the real world instead?
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@ Sword Art
The writing, is amateurish to the core. Its not so much the lack of any backstory or motivation besides "i'm playing a video game and i could die or w/e", its that
1. The guy is a loner. In the video game world, and especially the MMO world, this is the equivalent of being a loser of a nerd. Something almost impossible by todays standards, but none-the-less he is. How do you play an MMO by yourself, more the reason WHY would you play it by yourself? All mmo's are designed to be group oriented, thats literally what the name is, massive multiplayer online.
2. Talking in video game chat about beauty and stuff............in a video game. I don't understand how ANY of this scenario could not be in a realistic setting instead of "she used <<Thrust>>" like a goddamn pokemon/final fantasy battle. I mean futuristic or medieval it makes no difference, but real world could make this better. AND HAVE A STORY.
3. Describing how the game works. Such as upgrades and attacks. This in itself is lame, lame, lame. Not only are they the most boring things i could think of, but for gods sakes why bother? I could guess all this from basic logic of all things.
4. People just "die" or w/e without an explanation. In one instance "Sachi" or w/e, just "dies". Just like that, no explanation whatsoever, not from real world, not from the game. Not even is this looked into. This is how it went.
"There, in addition to the «Self» written there, my own inventory page, was another label that read the name «Sachi».
This is the result of a very good relationship between two players, but one which has not progressed to «Marriage» —such players set their own common items window. This is different from the way that all items in marriage are shared in that only items in this separate window are shared.
Sachi, who had never asked for a confession or to hold hands previously, requested shortly before her death to set up this window. When I asked for the reason, she gave an answer that was difficult to accept, that is was for easily exchanging healing potions and similar items—if this was the purpose, there was clearly already a guild open that could be used for that. But I nonetheless agreed, and set up this window to share only between Sachi and me.
Though Sachi died, this window still remained. Of course, the friend list would also still retain Sachi's name, but it would be a grey that could not be contacted. And the few remaining healing potions left in the shared inventory, these would also not be used. After half a year, even with the guild page deleted without feeling, I was unable to remove the label of Sachi's name. Of course—the reason was not that I believed she could be resurrected—I just couldn't forgive the self that would have been able to feel better after having deleted her name.
I only recovered and closed the window after looking at Sachi's name for ten minutes. It was two hours until midnight.
As I walked out of the room and towards the direction of the transfer gate, I kept thinking about that expression on Sachi's face in her final moment, what she was thinking, and, what exactly she wanted to say."
What the fuck? Like some kind of sob story over what? Someone with NO background, not even looked into again. Its just silly.
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Sword art is just an amateur writing giberish trying to improve, this isn't anything i would bother reading nor reccommend it. Its has nothing great to mention of. There is literally nothing i can say that makes it stand out from anything.
@ L
I liked the idea, but its not solid. You have no backstory, no buildup, and most of all, this WHOLE thing: is describing someone playing a video game. Its got no relevance to anything. I'm basically reading some guys actions/thoughts while playing his own version of Final Fantasy.
I suggest you watch/play the .Hack series, since you like this theme so much they are probably the best for it outside of the Matrix and Tron.