Looked kinda cool with the stuff below the focal like something on a floor or something idk, semi realism but it lost that aspect with the continuation of the stuff above it. You prolly werent going for a look like that but it woulda been cool if you coulda pulled it off.Maybe try removing the stuff on the top?? other than that it looks pretty good with the style youre going for.
I'm not really a fan of text but I think if you remove it you would lose the aspect of "emptiness" you are trying to go for. Anyways, good work as usually keep it up
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