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    Something i wrote tell me what yall think

    hey heres something i wrote i know some parts are a lill ehhhh but tell me what yall think i except all types of critizism so yea haha


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    omgawd.

    too lazy to watch.
    someone summarize?
    '08 MPGH OG

    You get the bag and fumble it
    I get the bag and flip it and tumble it
    Straight out the lot, 300 cash
    And the car came with a blunt in it
    Lil mama a thot, and she got ass
    And she gon' fuck up a bag
    Pull up to the spot, livin' too fast
    Droppin' the dope in the stash
    In Italy, got two foreign hoes, they DM me
    Drop the top when it's cold
    But you feel the heat
    Be real with me, just be real with me
    Eat it up like it's a feast
    They say the dope on fleek

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    haah its only like a min man lmao

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    You need a little more emotion. Good lyrics though.

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    They're songs...

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    little more emotion yea i will but its like 11 30 at night and my dads sleeping so idk i will redo it in the morning tomorro and put emotion in it but thanks tho man

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    I believe this it the correct section
    https://www.mpgh.net/forum/192-poetry...a-rap-stories/
    You sound like a white guy trying to rap
    /
    Needs a beat and more emotion
    it's like your whipsering into your mic because mommy's in the other room and cussing is bad for you
    and it's not except it's accept as in
    except is like, otherwise

    It's okay but, needs work
    I didn't really get any moral out of it / didn't really understand


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    TL;DR .

    Rick
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    Unsuccessful

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    Quote Originally Posted by Mr.T View Post
    TL;DR .
    What the fuck does that mean?

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    hum ok but yea i had to be quiet haha cause if my dad heard me hed get mad so i will redo it agin tomorro when hes at work so its sounds bettter plus its like 11 30 here when i did it so yep he woulda get hella mad if he herd me ahah and i woke him up hah but i will work on everything you all tell me

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    Quote Originally Posted by Vital View Post


    What the fuck does that mean?
    Too Long, Didn't Read--

    Quote Originally Posted by ShAg12345 View Post
    hum ok but yea i had to be quiet haha cause if my dad heard me hed get mad so i will redo it agin tomorro when hes at work so its sounds bettter plus its like 11 30 here when i did it so yep he woulda get hella mad if he herd me ahah and i woke him up hah but i will work on everything you all tell me
    Okay Shag, post it in the other section next time.
    and just put the link in your post:
    YouTube - Kanaal van rest of code here
    it will automatically embed, no need to click that Youtube button on the top settings / paste the embed code


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    ok thanks man but were the lyrics good and stuff?

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    Its orite. Lyrics are orite. Now you needa beat.

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    true ahah i do need a beat but i cant find any ones i like ha
    and thank you very much =)

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    Quote Originally Posted by ShAg12345 View Post
    true ahah i do need a beat but i cant find any ones i like ha
    and thank you very much =)
    MusicShake /
    make your own beat using MusicShake
    It's hella easy and customizable


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