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    Is my essay good?

    I read The Old Man And The Sea. I have a bunch to say about this book first thing I liked the book at the beginning, but when I got into it the book got better and better. The old man goes out to sail to the sea to end his streak of not catching fish in 84 days. He finds a big fish name Marlin and he catches it, but things turn out to backfire. He goes back then sharks come and they eat the big fish to the bone. And the old man is left with nothing so it is a sad book. With no happy ending that's why I didn't like this book and I hate it. And I wish I read another book than this. I recommend that no one reads this I think it would be better if it had a happy ending. For example he goes back home and he sharks come he fights the sharks then makes it back safely. And put like a epic detail battle it would be awesome and a good improvement. I thought it would been really better without the bad ending and with a good ending or a epic fight ending. But sadly they didn't put that.




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    - If it's a formal essay you cannot put "I".
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    Quote Originally Posted by Hugo Boss View Post
    - If it's a formal essay you cannot put "I".
    - You can't start a sentence with But
    - Some grammatical errors, i.e missing commas, periods
    - When introducing a book/novel, italicize or underline it
    - Essays are not that short
    - Points are repetitive and fluff fluff
    Dude I am the next Einstein, I know it is pretty good.




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    Quote Originally Posted by ineedtotrade! View Post
    Dude I am the next Einstein, I know it is pretty good.
    How about no.


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    Good troll mate.
    At least, I hope its a troll
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    Quote Originally Posted by TheFlyingDutchman' View Post
    Good troll mate.
    At least, I hope its a troll
    Isn't troll an armor in World of Warcraft? I don't "troll" then.




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    Yea, becouse your essay is horrible.
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    i vouch for this mate he never scam and will never do Bro trade only with OMM awesome account but i cant get it :'( goodluck selling it
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    he is very nice mate ! i vouch for him .. we did ava trades and he never scammed me +1 for u bro
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    Bought the crack pack from him. Seems good , has video tut and combo list thought I didn't manage to crack any account yet :P.
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    You must be stupid as fuck.

    You have one paragraph when you need like 6 more, and being longer than 2-3 sentences.

    Your grammar is shit.

    Please stop trying to troll you are really bad at it.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Exorcism View Post
    You must be stupid as fuck.

    You have one paragraph when you need like 6 more, and being longer than 2-3 sentences.

    Your grammar is shit.

    Please stop trying to troll you are really bad at it.
    Omg I so agree with you.
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    vouch for him too...hes a good seller
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    Comes with everything you need, easy to use and comes with video. Great for starters like me :P
    Also nice guy
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    well if u want to trade call me
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    i vouch for this mate he never scam and will never do Bro trade only with OMM awesome account but i cant get it :'( goodluck selling it
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    he is very nice mate ! i vouch for him .. we did ava trades and he never scammed me +1 for u bro
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    Bought the crack pack from him. Seems good , has video tut and combo list thought I didn't manage to crack any account yet :P.
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    Quote Originally Posted by TheFlyingDutchman' View Post
    Good troll mate.
    At least, I hope its a troll
    Fucking nail'd it hard...

    Quote Originally Posted by ineedtotrade! View Post
    Isn't troll an armor in World of Warcraft? I don't "troll" then.
    Damn right, you're too stupid to be able to troll.

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