I'm sorry but this is just absolutely shit quality in just about every aspect. Like this is really bad bro, but I don't entirely blame it on you. Whatever that kid used to recorded his voice must have been broken or something.
Overall, from what I saw editing wise, I give you 5/10. That 5 is for the effort.
Yo Assistive did you notice that call of duty gun shot at the beginning. Almost died cuz of that.