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    Hooks In The Sand

    Hooks In The Sand

    Cast a line in to the deep,
    High above the angels weep,
    Peering idly, earthen ledge,
    Gazing from the Ocean’s edge.
    Draw the black twine back to land,
    Hook drags lightly through the sand.
    Empty metal, torn through lip,
    Blood drips softly, sharpened tip.
    On the line you’ve used no bait,
    And yet your mind’s still filled with hate.
    Curse those evil, wicked fish,
    Dare they not be what you wish.
    Broken dreams that you devised,
    Wandering sheep; your own demise.
    Believing what’s just televised,
    Entire life absorbing lies.
    A wretched beast, your own creation,
    And yet the will…to scream damnation.
    For it wasn’t the hook, for it wasn’t the lake,
    This was your own breed, your own fatal mistake.
    You glamorize the evil, you idolize its face,
    When only just tomorrow, new hate’ll take its place.
    I am the seer in the dark,
    the vagabond of yore,
    valediction.
    I am the sum of all your parts,
    and proprietor of all.
    A miasma,
    the conclusion,
    blackmonger of Inlé,
    valediction.
    Synapses fray,
    my form now vivid,
    as torpor sets and blood grows tepid.
    With every ounce of flesh now offered,
    I hold your corpse within my coffers.
    Knitted cells now split asunder,
    stand alongside me brother.
    Take your place amongst my Owsla,
    we march at dawn now and forever.


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    Quote Originally Posted by Aborted View Post
    Hooks In The Sand

    Cast a line in to the deep,
    High above the angels weep,
    Peering idly, earthen ledge,
    Gazing from the Ocean’s edge.
    Draw the black twine back to land,
    Hook drags lightly through the sand.
    Empty metal, torn through lip,
    Blood drips softly, sharpened tip.
    On the line you’ve used no bait,
    And yet your mind’s still filled with hate.
    Curse those evil, wicked fish,
    Dare they not be what you wish.
    Broken dreams that you devised,
    Wandering sheep; your own demise.
    Believing what’s just televised,
    Entire life absorbing lies.
    A wretched beast, your own creation,
    And yet the will…to scream damnation.
    For it wasn’t the hook, for it wasn’t the lake,
    This was your own breed, your own fatal mistake.
    You glamorize the evil, you idolize its face,
    When only just tomorrow, new hate’ll take its place.
    holy shit that was fucking awesome. who knew you were such a poet

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    Aborted making a poem about fishing....wut?

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    Quote Originally Posted by Doc View Post
    Aborted making a poem about fishing....wut?
    It's meaning makes itself clear if you read into it.
    I am the seer in the dark,
    the vagabond of yore,
    valediction.
    I am the sum of all your parts,
    and proprietor of all.
    A miasma,
    the conclusion,
    blackmonger of Inlé,
    valediction.
    Synapses fray,
    my form now vivid,
    as torpor sets and blood grows tepid.
    With every ounce of flesh now offered,
    I hold your corpse within my coffers.
    Knitted cells now split asunder,
    stand alongside me brother.
    Take your place amongst my Owsla,
    we march at dawn now and forever.


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    Quote Originally Posted by Aborted View Post

    It's meaning makes itself clear if you read into it.
    Yea, I know but it's rather cool how you can use a rather mundane pastime and dig deeply and paint a much more sinister picture with it. Awesome poem.

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    Great , we have poet too. Nice poem

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    Very good, I love the dark style. I think "in to" is spelled together, though I could be wrong.
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