the flow is alil cracky , anyway hate the gangsta big talking lyrics
I dont give a fuck like im celibate
the truth? im telling it
Ill battle you, but just for the hell-of-it
Cause your rhymes are wack, in fact
im unique on the track
while your ass just wack prolly all hooked up on the crack
I might be smoking dope but your bitch-ass gonna choke
im going from luke warm to hot
best get out my spot
so dont come testin just cuz you toting smith and wesson
make sure that shits strapped
cause nothings stopping me but a well planned attack
and i dont give a shit like im constipated
i been patiently waiting to leave you foo's decapitated
so step up to the mic fearin me
and get your ass neutered lyrically
im the king, and im the champ
You the hoe, you the tramp
so go back to your bitch-crew
Snitches roll deep kid
Just like you.
Coincidence? Nah not in this instance
So keep your distance
or i'll beat you like c.o.'s beat cuffed inmates for "resistance"
Be shook cuz other kids are worried about the remains
Im just worried about the bloodstains on my brand-names
By:/me
Thank or respond (rap style) if you like it
"It is dangerous to be right when the government is wrong."
Voltaire
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the flow is alil cracky , anyway hate the gangsta big talking lyrics
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Yeah, I agree that the flow is a bit choppy. The most generic advice for flow is, the lines have to match up.
Example -
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As far as word choice, I absolutely loved it, You don't use simplistic terms, It's excellent. For a general call-out it was overall pretty good since there wasn't a target to use personals on.
AesopRock1227 (10-11-2010)
You think your all tough
but you aint no shit
ill whip your ass ill kick it
ill blow you to pieces believe it
think you can beat me
cause your full of bullshit
Ill tear your face up
rip it to pieces
All im doing is spitting some shit
but im gonna pwn your ass believe it
(I know it aint that good but its my first)
AesopRock1227 (10-12-2010)
If i record it ill repost and you can hear how its supposed to sound
Now its time for all kids to go back to class
ill spit so many punchlines
that youll fall flat on your ass
have you cryin in no time
This kid Gamer?
Yea i hear hes a flamer
yo but kid thats so ridiculous
cause im meticulous when ripping this
ill break your hip, nose, and wrist
then just fade back in the mist like i dont even exist
you get it? man your shit was aiight
but i beat up kids like you on the way to fights...
LOL nothing personal just had to attack you back to keep it going =P
Yours was good for 1st try
Last edited by AesopRock1227; 10-11-2010 at 03:55 PM.
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@~Gamer~ : I love how you kept the same rhyme the entire way down lol. Just keep trying, Rap is something you feel, Don't force it.
@Aesop : You do recording? If So, You and I need to release a collaborated track. Or a Spoof Battle Track
Yea i record sometimes. I got a cd i could post possibly, i used to do shows
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Yeah I used to do a few shows myself, Never made an Official CD though, That's very nice. Used to do a lot of "Open Mics" And "Cyphers" Though. Add me On MSN If You have it ya?
Hip.Hop.Poet@hotmail.com
We Need to do a Song.
Lol. Aesop Rock- Big Bang, Literally just came on from my playlist.
Last edited by Evelyn; 10-11-2010 at 04:08 PM.
Looks Pretty Nice Guys. Keep Going.
Cuties<3
Yea fun while it lasted but dont have much of my own equipment since the kid i was rappin with has beef now...
I got no msn but we can try to figure something out. I cant find my cds anywhere since i moved o.O i hope i can find them since i have no backup
Aesop Rock - No Regrets, Basic Cable, and Panarama 9b threeway tie for my favorites
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ehhh not my style but decent keep trying
Not bad, but I ain't givin up just yet
Good, but check out this shit
dude that's all you got
I shit a better rap than that
makin fun of my name
dude that's just downright lame
you think you can beat me up
don't make me rough your ass up
now I think that's enough
let's see you rap some stuff
(yah it's kinda short)
Last edited by ~Gamer~; 10-11-2010 at 05:43 PM.
AesopRock1227 (10-12-2010)
my rap in another post works perfect for this:
what do u know, u guys cant rap
i got a chip on my shoulder im tippin my hat
posers this is art, it aint for u
u be trippin on the sidewalk while tryin to tie your shoe
even though they say opposites attract,
im so much better, you just cant react.
you got your lols, ur g.t.gs
but right now this rapoff is history.
I blew u away, buts thats the only blowin I do,
to bad I just wish it was the same for you
AesopRock1227 (10-12-2010)