Tell me what you think about my song

[Oneirish]

Tell me how this song sounds or atleast the lyrics if you can't read the tab.

Constructive criticism, no ******s. I'm writing a new song to play live. Thank you.

CAPO 7
Standard Tuning

e
B
G
D
A
E

INTRO:

e|-0-0-3-0-0-| |-0-0-3-0-0-| |-0-0-3-0-0-| |-0-0-3-0-0-|
B|-0-3-3-3-0-| |-0-3-3-3-0-| |-0-3-3-3-0-| |-0-3-3-3-0-|
G|-0-0-0-0-0-| |-2-2-2-2-2-| |-0-0-0-0-0-| |-0-0-0-0-0-|
D|-0-0-0-0-0-| |-0-0-0-0-0-| |-2-2-2-2-2-| |-2-2-2-2-2-|
A|-2-2-2-2-2-| |-0-0-0-0-0-| |-2-2-2-2-2-| |-3-3-3-3-3-|
E|-3-3-3-3-3-| |-2-2-2-2-2-| |-0-0-0-0-0-| |-0-0-0-0-0-|

Each Chord x3 Last 4th chord x4 of each set.

CHORUS:

|-0-| |-0-| |-0-| |-0-|
|-1-| |-1-| |-1-| |-3-|
|-2-| |-0-| |-0-| |-0-|
|-2-| |-2-| |-0-| |-0-|
|-0-| |-3-| |-2-| |-2-|
|-0-| |-0-| |-3-| |-3-|

Each chord x8

LYRICS:

(intro)
Warm
Warm is the wrong word
That I would use to describe you
I’m only telling the truth
Cold
Such a vague meaning but
Cold is how I left you
Standing there in the parking lot
As I gave it all back
Even your moms melting pots
Wrong
I know you were everything
The one thing that was my only thing
Guess the part of jealously
Made hate me.

(chorus)
I have nothing ill against
Hope you don’t feel the pain.
Go around and be ok.
But I’m telling you
I’m not going to stay
No matter what you say
I'm not okay

(intro)
Fast-forward two years later
Now you’re a statue
So petrified you can’t move
Immobile
Sitting there emotionless
I didn’t do this
Your insecurity
Made me the enemy so
I had to leave you petrified

(chorus)
I have nothing ill against
Hope you don’t feel the pain.
Go around and be ok.
But I’m telling you
I’m not going to stay
No matter what you say
I'm not okay

(intro)
Ice covered on your face
When are you gonna break
Peppermint last
Only One day
So one last time
Take a look back
Find all your answers
To why I went away.

(chorus)
I have nothing ill against
Hope you don’t feel the pain.
Go around and be ok.
But I’m telling you
I’m not going to stay
No matter what you say
I'm not okay

[kevin66062]

Your lyrics? Wow..It's good enough to be sung.

[GOD]

what type of music is this? rap/rock/? sounds like a soft romantic type..

nice lyrics

[Iwin]

are you gonna use FL studio? Just wondering.

[Oneirish]

It's a soft Acoustic song. Do you know of Dashboard Confessional, Plain White T's, Howie Day. Stuff like that I guess.

[Oneirish]

are you gonna use FL studio? Just wondering.

Nope. I'm performing live at this bar and grill with my friend. He's my back-up singer, and lead acoustic guitarist. I'm the Rythem guitarist. He does all the cool solo shit, while I keep the beat I guess.

[Iwin]

Nope. I'm performing live at this bar and grill with my friend. He's my back-up singer, and lead acoustic guitarist. I'm the Rythem guitarist. He does all the cool solo shit, while I keep the beat I guess.

Wow sounds fantastic man

you should definitely record and put on YouTube first

Edit: 1.6k posts

[Oneirish]

Ya, Lol. I'll try. I need to get a good recording software to do with my friend. Or if someone films at one of my live performances.

[Iwin]

Ya, Lol. I'll try. I need to get a good recording software to do with my friend. Or if someone films at one of my live performances.

When are you performing?

[Oneirish]

Umm in 1 week. So have to get everything ready. Opening for a guy named Brett Dennen. So it should be good.

[Iwin]

nice nice. good luck. I'll read over lyrics tomorrow

[Gourav2122]

tape it and post it on mpgh <3
we would love to make fun of your singing

[Oneirish]

Gourav you haven't heard me. Dave, Arun, Paroxysm, and I think jetamay heard me sing, harmonica, and guitar. And liked it, so ya.

[Plokmii]

Looks like a good song Irish cant wait to hear

[Gourav2122]

Gourav you haven't heard me. Dave, Arun, Paroxysm, and I think jetamay heard me sing, harmonica, and guitar. And liked it, so ya.

i hurd you playing your austist guitar thangy some time ago
meh..
dont matter we will still find a way to make fun of you