Small part of story I've been working on

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Hey I've been working on a book and wanted to post a small part of it so ic an get some comments about it. This is only a very very very small part of it though. Plz comment about your opinions



im going to add the story up to chapter 5 in a second but i need to type it up. It will only be a few minutes until ill have that. Itll be much better i believe if u had a little more of the story