[HELP] Is this Report worth a B (For English9 Standard.)?

[EpixPiratez]

Just letting you guys know that I wrote this impromptu in like 15 minutes even tough I had like 3 weeks to do this.
I hope that some of you can give me some constructive criticism on it.
I don't really need an A-Plus paper; it would be nice though.

Anyways here's a Report on The Great Depression.
In correlation of what happened in the book 'To Kill A Mockingbird.'
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In To Kill A Mockingbird the Great Depression dramatically affected many people during the 1930‘s. This was because of the stock market crash of 1929; specificially what happenned was a high inflation and deflation in prices, huge drops in demand and credit, and low amounts of forign trade.

*Check some pictures that I found to help support my topic.*

During the Great Depression many Jobs and Buisnesses were dramtically affected.
Many people were poor, even destitute, and many had troubles supporting their families. Approximately 1/4 (25%) of Americans during the Great Depression didn’t have a job.
Wages were scaled down to 20%, that made it hard to support a family. This didnt’ have much of an affect of the Finches, mainly because Atticus Finch is a somewhat successful lawyer. But for the majority in Maycomb it wasn’t well. Many were homeless, hungry, racist (mainly because their in the South part of the US, which was mostly racist.), and poor.

Our Standard Of Living was decreased because wages were scaled down to 20%. Most people with a 20% lower amount of cash than they had in the past had life get even harder. And even people who just got their job(s); if they’re lucky enough to get one, were still having many troubles financially.

The US wasn’t available to much resources during The Great Depression. This was mainly due to many reasons such as: Low trade, inflation and deflation of prices, terrible droughts, and more. The many agricultural problems the US had made it even harder to get crops and other natural resources. A lack loans during a critical time gave farmers difficulties mass-producing food.

And now you may still be asking “How does this have an impact on the Finch family?”. Well with many racist (not their family) it was hard for Atticus to win court-cases when he’s defending a black man; innocent or not. Also with many poor, many are angry too. This isn’t such a good time to be around on because everything i failing and wveryone is mad. And the way people may end up can be somewhat determined by the background he/she grows up in.

Thank You!

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Peer Editing From:

Some friends from MPGH Forums.
Dawson O’Neil
Marco (Brother)



Resource Websites:

SparkNotes
NetTrekker
AmericanHistory.Abou*****m
Buzzle.com

[KingDot]

Who uses letter marking anymore?

You're in grade 9 dawg.

[[MPGH]Hugo Boss]

It's just a report and not an essay right?

[EpixPiratez]

ESSAY.
I made in like 15 mins.

[KingDot]

ESSAY.
I made in like 15 mins.

Well doesn't seem like you put much effort into it

[Canadian]

That's pretty fucked up, I'm reading To kill a mocking bird also in my English class.
About half way done, I also have to write a essay which is going to be the death of me.

[EpixPiratez]

Oh, i didn't spend much time on it. It only took me 15minutes to complete and it's very impromptu.

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That's pretty fucked up, I'm reading To kill a mocking bird also in my English class.
About half way done, I also have to write a essay which is going to be the death of me.

is it due tomorrow?

[[MPGH]Hugo Boss]

ESSAY.
I made in like 15 mins.

You should have a longer intro like basic stuff, then thesis in the end of the intro. 1st, 2nd and 3rd body paragraph and then ending which wraps up the intro and having a thesis in the end also to recap everything.

[Asuna]

I thought it would be longer...

[Anti]

Son, I am disappoint.

[EpixPiratez]

Sorry guys. I'm a bad writer. I'm alot more of a Mathematics or Science Person...

[Zithium]

I'm with @Hugo Boss

All you gotta do is bulk it up a bit, when writing you should always use a structure, preferably you should already have this done before you start your essay.

Just jot down the main points in order on a sheet of paper, keep working with your 'rough' copy adding bits in where you see fits. And then you should use the structure you've made as a base for your actual essay.