Turn your mic up, it sounds like you are talking with a sock in your mouth. You have no real flow. Also the type of beat you are using doesn't put off the effect that you are trying to put off in your "Rap". Please read a dictionary and learn more words than fuck. Doesn't rhyme with everything anyway.\
Also would like to add that you don't really put off any emotion with your rap. That is how I know you don't really expect anything out of it.
LEARN TO RAP