Life

[ShAg123]

life

is full of choices And decisions
people make every single day
every man has got his own mission
so listen to what i got to say.

a man whithout a dream
is not a man at all
for what they fear in them
is the day that they fall.

they all have a sense of pride
you can never steal nor break
altho the tension that lies inside
your taught to never make a mistake

for now your a young man growing up
for you faught for your life and belifes
you never lost and never gave up
and you always played for keeps


for now your a grown man whith a family
you been unemployed for a few months now
and all you see is your family happily
for now your behind on bills you start to feel down

so now you may lose all you worked for
all that blood and sweat for this life
so listen to this befor
you are not at teh end of your line

your now a old man in his 70's
you have came seen and conquerd
all your kids beg please
then you fade away and you start to pownder

you take one more look at the life you have made
you will leave a impact on everyones life
for they all know that you cant always stay
for all men set their bar and you have set your high

Now that your gone your impact stays
for everything you have done
no one will forget even past then end of days
now this is it breaks me to think that your gone.

Now for life can be crule and mean
but you will always move on
it will never get the best of me
for thats men life and beyond

[Obama]

"a man whithout a dream
is not a man at all
for what they fear in them
is the day that they fall."



Thats my fav part. Only thing I would work on is the rhythm of the poem, mainly the rhyming part. Poems that don't rhyme repetitively usually are more powerful imo. Just a suggestion.

[ShAg123]

Thanks i will work on the rhyming part. And thanks agin =)