Need some feedback

I been working on some music that i wrote. Im finally started to record it.

Here are 2 versions of this short example of what i want the full version to be.

Example 1

Example 2 weird version

After listening to this you might say wtf.

let me know what you think so i can produce the full version soon.

I couldn't post on youtube because it is acting funny for me.

Sounds like an 8 year old retard playing guitar

That...... Upsets me................ Its all classic guitar.

well, i listened to it, and it may need some work but it sounds pretty good actually. The first one that is. the second one is just shit.

yea i was high when i did the 2nd one.

ahaha that explains it. ill listen to it later when im high enough and see what i think of it.

The second one is played backwards btw.

yeh i could hear that

I like all sorts of music.
I just got me a sound room set up.
I got a buddy of mine comin out of florida to jam.
He is going to help me add the metal verse to the first example for the full cut.