Syke!

Rate/CnC?

get rid of the text, or if you really want it, make it blend in more and be in a different area.

affff parody, lrn2cnc k? The text is alright but next time, dim the flow a little. also, that bright spot in the mid up right corner creates a second focal.
Also too much contrast, and try bringing out the render, it just looks like you slapped on some c4d`s adjusted some colors, dimmed the opacity and thats it

oh and teh border affff