why do you keep fighting the crit, take it learn from it and then move on jesus, no ones gonna comment if you argue with them that there opinions wrong, its a 4/10 for me
all you did was but two renders with c4d and text not that in depth, get some tuts and create some flow and edit the images, just play with it till you think it has flow and some differences that separate you from just some choob with photoshop