Tbh this seems like 5 minutes of work =/
I dont know why you would choose this render, it takes up most of the tag and hes facing one way with a ginormous weapon facing the other way, how did you think you could create any kind of flow?
Random c4ds, text is awful (try not abuse layer styles on text..nn outer/inner glow etc). Its just a chaotic mess.
Lay off the topaz :s