No, he shouldn't.
Anyways, MMD.
The colors of your render, and the colors of your background, just don't match.
Orange and blue don't flow with each other that well.
Your render is blended in like crap, you could do better.
The text is amateurish, can be a lot better.
There is no real flow, nor lightning. And there isn't even depth.
4.5/10.