First Rap

time flies when you're swimming in an open mind. why don't I open up and
we'll see what we can find. just give me 5 minutes and i'll let my brilliance
shine. I got into rap to show this world what I'm really about. Not drugs,
sex,and getting blacked out. nah, having fun, living free, just chillin out.
My biggest fear in life is growing up and being nameless, i swear to god
one day I'll be famous. I slack off in school so no way i could be a genius.
My only solution is to give up and become an artist. MY insperation may come
diferently. I didn't grow up in the ghetto or live on the street.
I'm a white middle class american. My biggest problem is solving a math equation.
Hip-Hop is the language of my life. I put my headphones on and i put down
the knife. One of the main things i struggle with is depression. that and
my lack to need progression. but in the end i can see my succession. My
favorite artists are macklemore and eminem, they gave me the insperation to
pick up the pen. give me time, i'll be big enough to hang with them.

lyric is good the flow is bad! rework it and it got be good

Not bad. And yea your flow needs some work.